June 19, 2022


  • Small mix tweak on “Dream City”
  • I think we got it

Hatchford Hotel

  • I didn’t think there was any other sizeable rewrites. I was wrong.
  • I took Nate V’s advice on economy of locations to heart and jotted down notes on how we could remove all of the bedroom scenes by moving them to the lobby.
  • Then other dominoes fell as a result and I ended up with two full pages of notes about possible tweaks.
  • Possibly remove some car scenes as well.
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May 25, 2022

Hatchford Hotel (though this might have been May 24th)

  • Was reviewing the rewrites Greg and I did and realized I forgot to remove some of the lines we agreed to remove.
  • Also found a couple small logistical issues.
  • Script is now down to 96 pages (pending Greg’s sign off)
  • Remember when it was 172 pages?

Elephants of Scotland

  • Recorded electric piano part for “Vanishing Twin”
  • Added in new intro piece “Stasis” that will get reprised in a fuller fashion later.
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